Date: Jun. 8th, 2011 06:28 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] lucathia
It took me forever to comment on this! I read it when you posted though. XD; It was around my birthday... was somehow super busy then. XD

And I thought I'd need to bring in my next plotpoint/idea to make this past the 50k mark.
*looks at word count* You almost doubled that. =P This so could have gone over 100k, omg!!

We've never-" He broke off, looking away.
D:

Interesting detail about the blood marks on the ground...

"You're…going to need to wash that blood off."
That's so not going to be an easy feat.

Ah, so new cardkeys. Guess they didn't need the old ones!

I keep feeling that they shouldn't be spending time washing off blood in the bathroom... would that really help? :O

"I think," Ronthar said slowly when he grabbed another handful, "we need to talk about what signals mean what."
Ahahaha. Maybe, but then they probably don't need the signals again...

It was a welcome distraction though for both of them – he could hear that Ronthar's voice wasn't that steady either.
KLAD;FA Unsteady voices. Oh gosh, the two of them. I wish they didn't have to be in this situation!

"It's good to have you back in my possession again."
In his... possession. Wow. He's pretty sure of himself there.

Wait, that ball of light was Fion?
XD; Ball of light makes me think of Navi from Zelda... except Fion's so much bigger than that. =P

"But if the magic knew that its previous host was dead, it may be more amicable to trying a new host."
0___________0;; TWISTED LOGIC.

He couldn't stop himself from balking slightly every time he called his magic, giving Balt that extra second to move and aim.
D:

Ronthar!!!!

Fion! \o/

"Could ya lower your brightness or somethin' so I can see?"
Ahahaha. XD

Ick, using Balt's clothes...

Oh. That… Marland had no idea if that made sense.
XD;

"Being shot," Ronthar said haltingly at one point, "looks easier on TV."
lkj;adkfa; I don't know if I should be amused. I am amused, but nooo Ronthar, save your breath! Don't go all reminiscing...

AAAHHHHHhhhhh I love this next bit with how Ronthar starts with "Oh" and then apologizes. And then he drops the bomb about remembering being Shodin. =P This part is so much love!! \o/

It was slow going, and Marland heard only one-half of the conversation as Fion and Ronthar chatted with each other.
Heh, only hearing one side of the conversation. :3

Ahhhh, fire alarm. But hey, looks like no one's coming after them...

"And I don't suppose you come with a dimness switch or something?"
XD;

Oooooo, Fion and Ronthar... merging or something. XD; Too big for the van. XD

"But what are we going to tell the doctors?" Dinnow asked.

"Someone thought… I was a xeno?" Ronthar joked.

Ahahaha! The irony!

Oh Marland. Of course your flat is quiet. You're all by yourself. ): Pai! Didn't feel her presence much in the second half of the story. I...almost forgot about her.

Haha, Kendal. So amusing. XD;

Except she'd given him two by accident.
Hm, two? By accident? XD;

She came up carefully and Marland felt a little worried at the time it took her. If she'd been injured, why hadn't she asked someone else to bring it up?
Ohoho~

Eeeeee, Ronthar! I knew it. =P

Ahaha, and now Marland is jumping into assumptions about Ronthar coming to get his stuff back. =P

"I want to be called Shodin."
^_________________^

"But," Marland spluttered, "why do you want to called after a tree?"
HAHAHAHAHA. Maybe because you were the one who gave him the name

The answer was yes.
<33333

The ending is so, so cute. XD; It's... warm. Fuzzy. XD; I certainly felt like this ended with a hug!
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