esp_dragon: (Kenshin)
[personal profile] esp_dragon
Fandom: Half Prince
Summary: Kenshin could see something glittering out the corner of his eye. "The ocean..."
Rating: K
Notes: Set in chapter 28.
Sort of twisting the meaning of the proverb here. Or just going for the literal meaning, I guess.
Argh. I said one hundred words. *flail*
Genre: General
Word count: 467
Status: Complete



The bustle of the crowd around him left Kenshin feeling uneasy, not used to being surrounded by so many players, especially when his only experience of them had always been to fight with them. 'Nearly always,' he corrected, steeling himself as he followed Prince's back. He still wasn't sure what to make of the elf, whose emotions shifted constantly, his gestures wild and exaggerated, yet Prince seemed entirely sincere in his want to help him and Sunshine.

The city was different from what he remembered of Snow village, if those memories could be trusted. But he put that thought to the back of his mind as he saw something glittering out the corner of his eye. He slowed down and turned his head to get a better look and saw a big mass of blue. It wasn't the sky; the sky didn't sparkle, not when it was that colour, and it was too low.

Like in a dream, he made his way towards it, ignoring everyone around him, drinking up the sight as the buildings thinned the closer he got, revealing even more of it than he thought there could be. It stretched far across into distance, touching the horizon, and he felt the sun warm his face as he stood there, entranced by the constant movement in front of him.

"The ocean..."

He'd seen water before, of course he had, he knew what it was, but what he had seen was puddles on a stone floor, where sometimes there wasn't enough there to even splash past his sandals. And the water that he had seen was in the depths of the cave, where there was no sunlight to catch it and if it was outside, it was at the very bottom of the cliffs, where the sun had to try very hard to reach there, and that was before the matter of the mist was factored in.

Kenshin heard footsteps come up behind him, but for once, he didn't tense up. Prince stopped next to him, his eyes pinned on the water too.

"Beautiful, right?" Prince asked softly. He agreed with him, nodding, just listening to the waves as they lapped at the dock, hearing the boats creak as they bobbed up and down. "After saving Sunshine, let's go the central continent together. You two will definitely be able to see many more beautiful scenes."

There was more like this? He couldn't imagine it. He couldn't think what else was out there that could be like this, but then, he didn't know much of the world, really. "Yeah." A slight breeze picked up, lazily tugging at his hair as he continued to stare out at the ocean. If this was just one of the sights that he could see, he couldn't wait to see the others.

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XD A fic describing the ocean.

Date: Mar. 22nd, 2010 08:39 am (UTC)
darkicedragon: M-21 from Noblesse (Default)
From: [personal profile] darkicedragon
Yeah, I thought it was thinks, but then it goes against the past tense of the rest of the fic. And thought doesn't make sense since he hasn't experienced them yet. =/ I was thinking of using 'He was looking forward to it' instead.

:D Hee. Thanks.

Date: Mar. 22nd, 2010 09:35 am (UTC)
lucathia: (Default)
From: [personal profile] lucathia
Or maybe add an action somewhere? Like..."He looked out across the water and wondered about the sights he would see."

Because grammar-wise, the current last sentence does feel a little weird, and I think the ending would feel stronger with an action, or maybe a description of Kenshin's expression or how he's feeling. :3

Date: Mar. 22nd, 2010 08:41 pm (UTC)
darkicedragon: Sleepy Jim from Hand x Red lying on the ground, his head nestled over his crossed arms, a small 'z' above him (Sleepy)
From: [personal profile] darkicedragon
'Transfixed by the sight in front of him, there was no other thing he wanted to do now except see more scenes like this one.'
'A slight breeze picked up, lazily tugging at his hair as he continued to stare out at the ocean. If this was just one of the sights that he could see, he couldn't wait to see the others.'
'It would be interesting to see them all.'


Aaaand I just wanna fall asleep right now. ^ ^

Date: Mar. 22nd, 2010 09:56 pm (UTC)
lucathia: (Default)
From: [personal profile] lucathia
I like the second one the best.

I hope you were able to sleep!

Date: Mar. 23rd, 2010 04:59 am (UTC)
darkicedragon: M-21 from Noblesse (Kenshin surprised)
From: [personal profile] darkicedragon
Okay, I'll use that one. Thanks for all the help! :D

:) Yeah, I was.

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